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Self-Injury

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You see the blood running down
Its such a beautiful sight
Such a beautiful release
It calms your mind
Soothes your fears
Now you taste it, thick and warm
As it spreads over your tongue
It’s not a game
In which death is your goal
When placing the blade against the skin you must realize that you hold a lot of power
The power to control the mind and stabilize emotions
The power to release tension and calm the mind
You don't go out and kill
In fact you don’t even harm them
But it is upon your own flesh that the blood will arise



I would love to have some feedback. Feel free to e-mail me too.

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Love and hate
Two opposites
yet the same
where there is one
there must be another
Locked away
waiting to be discovered
is the truth
of these two emotions
Hidden from the world
Deep in our souls
The turmoil of it all
unfolds
As you speak
what you have been holding
For the pain has grown
Like a cancer
tearing you apart
once again
we are alone
alone with ourselves
we have pushed away
nothing to hear
nothing to say
only what we strive to regain
a constant strugle
a constant fear of you
And what lies ahead
I'll never know
I'll never know

Feedback is much appreciated. And yes, I know I can't spell and my grammar sux.

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Umm. Confused. Jumbled. Lots of interesting thoughts, but all said in a haphazard way.

Sentence structure to small. Your poem should flow like a river, and give a sense of timing as you read it, and this doesn't. It's choppy, and it stunts it's own progress.

Try again, and try to organise your thoughts in a pattern that is easily followed and read by someone who likes the idea you are trying to present.

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PS! Change your picture please.

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*sigh*

LOOK. NOT AMUSED.

Understand this is your forum. Understand that this is your outlet. If you are 'goth' so called, so termed, it does NOT follow that you have to be a cutter.

If you're a cutter, it does NOT follow you like it. It does NOT follow that it's amusing. It does NOT follow that it is something to write about as if you have to share this experience in every which way. For many people it's a dark horror.

That being said, I see this poem, I see that it says something important, and I understand that I don't know you or your situation. BUT it also follows that THIS is a PUBLIC forum. You can see from this forum and other conversations about SI, that it's a difficult subject for EVERYONE. SO SUCH POETRY is NOT looked upon lightly or accepted lightly.

RECONSIDER the need to post such things.

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Although my writing is not for amusement, I'm sorry if my work has offended you in any way. However, disomfort with a subject is often from lack of knowledge. Thank you for bringing your distaste to my attention. Now I know to use more disgression when posting. And maybe I like my poetry choppy.

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Not to be an ass but, do you want me to change my user name too?

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Your work does not offend me per se, but your picture did. And your poetry can be distasteful if that is your choice, but be aware of other users on this forum who are battling such illnesses that you speak about. For them it's VERY difficult to see what you say or write.

You don't have to post everything you write. But it's your choice. BTW do I like your name or not>? In truth NO, why? Because it draws attention to yourself, and for all the wrong reasons. Hey, you asked. Now you have an answer.

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good point. We should be here to help not harm. Poetry like that might trigger someone.

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Well I appreciate the reply. I do not want to appear an ass, and you can continue on in the same style if that's your choice, but if you browse around this forum, you'll see what I was trying to point out to you, hence my comment.

I don't know if you're being sarcastic or straight with me. People can be triggered by such things, it's simply something to think over.

If you think I'm trying to push buttons or something, then I am not, but would be happy to discuss this in private if you wish?

Let me know.

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I understand your concern and I don't think you are an ass. I did before though. However, you do come across as an English teacher or something. And yes, I am being straight with you.
If you want me to shut up, tell me. And yes, I know, my grammar sux and I can't spell.

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And I changed my user name. Besides, music is a much better quality to flaunt.
If you want me to shut up, tell me. And yes, I know, my grammar sux and I can't spell.




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