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Odin X

Odin X

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O Death

O Death why do you follow me?
O Death why do you take me friends?
O Death why me why not someone else?
O Death go a way stay a why.
O Death leave me a lone O Death.
O Death stop being my shadow.
O Death i would like to life with out death for a little while.

In the Shadows of a death and decay that I dewell in untell the day that I cen kill every one left a live.

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Odin X

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To die with out yor love.
That will not let me rest in my heven.
For I shell for ever rome the eath with it.

So tell me not of your hate for me,
but tell me of your geat love for me and the days that we spent togther

Do not tell me of the evil that I have brot to you, but of the good that I have brot us

Please! peassse! P-L-E-ase!

And as his death came all thatwhus sed from his love whus.......
For give me
:(

Edited by Odin X, 08 February 2005 - 03:05 PM.

In the Shadows of a death and decay that I dewell in untell the day that I cen kill every one left a live.

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my bad on the A: up there so tell me.
In the Shadows of a death and decay that I dewell in untell the day that I cen kill every one left a live.

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as i wolk therow live death plays with my love ones....
as my love one die in frunt of my eye's there love one come to me to keep them up but' I How need them to keep my up.
so now there wall is hollow inside but is forst to be the one that never
fell.
but litte do they now i'm no longer I live in side but just a wolking talking dead man in side!!!!!
:(

Edited by Odin X, 09 February 2005 - 04:44 PM.

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Holds some promise, but if you could use some definate improvements, try having someone proofread your poems before you submit them online, your grammar... well... it seems to be your main problem. Otherwise try to keep your eye on meter, alliteration, rhyme scheme, etc... But keep it up, you have some good ideas. You just need to work o nall the little "technical" things.

My sig is short simple and sweet, very much unlike life.


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O.K thancks
In the Shadows of a death and decay that I dewell in untell the day that I cen kill every one left a live.




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