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Poll: Is there a heaven and hell? (7 member(s) have cast votes)

Is there a heaven and hell?

  1. Just heaven (0 votes [0.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 0.00%

  2. Just Hell (1 votes [20.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 20.00%

  3. Both (4 votes [80.00%])

    Percentage of vote: 80.00%

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misunderstoodgirl

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thogh no one is here that can care
ill just pull out my long hair
ill scream at the top of my heart
and hope that someone rips it apart!

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Short and sincere. And it rhymes! :)

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my life has turned in so many ways.
with kisses of hate in single days
with hate in my life
i grab this knife
i will hold it close to what i need
ill cut and then watch it bleed

i hope you can understand
i dont want any helping hand
scream and cry
and then soon ill die

but whatever i believe
ill over come and soon ill leave
leave from this hateful place
ill hide my face

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misunderstoodgirl

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red, like the paint on a sheet
the ones that wont let in heat
the color is bold yet to plain
but the meaning lets out so much pain

Bloodstains on my wrist
because i made you pissed
Bloodstains on my head
there it is all over my bed

the smell is all over my place
theres blood all over my face
you hurt me way to much
i cant stand your bloody touch

Bloodstains on the gun
dont belive what i have done
Bloodstains on my lace
from your bloody face

you had your chance to stop
you even lied to the cop
you should of yelled
but you never bailed

Bloodstains in my heart
you ripped it apart
Bloodstains in my mind
Your body there'll never find

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i know it was kindof short but i have alot of longer ones

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No, it's good that it's short. Having a shorter poem makes the message you're trying to get across alot more powerful. If you lengthen a poem superficially it's initial message is washed away.
Sint mihi dei acherontis propitii, valeat numen triplex Jehovae, ignei areii, aquantani spiritus salvete: orientis princeps Belzebub, inferni ardentis monarcha et demigorgon, propitiamus vos, ut appareat, et surgat Mephostophilis...

quod tumeraris: per Jehovam, gehnnam, et consecratam aquam quam nunc spargo; signumque crucis quod nunc facio; et per vota nostra ipse nunc surgat nobis dicatus Mephostophils!!!
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nice poem, but it makes me want to hug you *hug*

oh and i voted =)
"Do not think outside the box! Yet do not think inside the box, think in a whole new dimension."
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your poems are really deep and give me visualizations as i read them, they are very effective and i think you have lots of writing talent
"Do not think outside the box! Yet do not think inside the box, think in a whole new dimension."
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**off-topic**-***sorta*** I would just like to point out that in your poll you left out the option of saying neither. I don't follow the beliefs of there being a heaven or hell, but would like to cast my vote on something none-the-less :D

Other-wise nice poetry, my only request is that you do a little more grammatically and add some more punctuation. Punctuation is a very important aspect of literature and shouldn't be cast so easily aside.

My sig is short simple and sweet, very much unlike life.


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I know my grammer and all isnt the best or at least my punctuation isnt either. but the point is that i write what is on my mind. I like my poetry and yes it is deep but people never seem to tell it like it is and any one who is everyone has had that one feeling that they lie about. the only differance with me is i tell about my feeling or feelings.

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Wow. I'm really impressed. It's brutal reality, and it works. It really gets the point across without to much metaphor; granted, metaphor is good in some cases, but this is cool. Very nice work. :)

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We all eat, drink, piss, shit, fuck, and die. Someone mind tellin' me the punch line?


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Your works are similar to mine in that they are pure emotion spilled into words and that they are unrefined.

I love it.

Except that when I read them I sort of revisit sections of my mind that I've repressed.

Keep on keepin' on!

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The poetry in here is my perfect read for this evening. I love the line 'I can't stand your bloody touch'. I couldn't vote, though, I'm afraid, as there isn't an option for people who don't believe in either.
Laugh at tyrants and the tragedy they inflict; our tears are evidence of subservience but our laughter condemns them to ignominy.

I'm going to do everything and everyone I ever wanted to do, some stuff I said I'd never do so I know what i'm missing out on, and then I'm going to make glow in the dark chocolate pudding for everyone.

Underworld officials say they have not yet decided on a permanent punishment for the terrorists.

"Eventually, we'll settle on an eternal and unending task for them," said Lord Androalphus, High Praetor of Excruciations. "But for now, everyone down here wants a crack at them. The legions of fang-wombed hags will take their pleasure on their shattered carcasses for most of this afternoon. Tomorrow, their flesh will be melted from their bones like wax in the burning embrace of the Mother of Cowards. The day after that, they'll be sodomized by the Fallen and their bowels shredded by a demonic ejaculate of burning sand. Then, on Sunday, Satan gets them all day. I can't even imagine what he's got cooked up for them."

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Yeah, what's the deal with the poll? It really begs the question.

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It's kind of like being asked at the doctor's, so are you male or are you a rabbit?
Laugh at tyrants and the tragedy they inflict; our tears are evidence of subservience but our laughter condemns them to ignominy.

I'm going to do everything and everyone I ever wanted to do, some stuff I said I'd never do so I know what i'm missing out on, and then I'm going to make glow in the dark chocolate pudding for everyone.

Underworld officials say they have not yet decided on a permanent punishment for the terrorists.

"Eventually, we'll settle on an eternal and unending task for them," said Lord Androalphus, High Praetor of Excruciations. "But for now, everyone down here wants a crack at them. The legions of fang-wombed hags will take their pleasure on their shattered carcasses for most of this afternoon. Tomorrow, their flesh will be melted from their bones like wax in the burning embrace of the Mother of Cowards. The day after that, they'll be sodomized by the Fallen and their bowels shredded by a demonic ejaculate of burning sand. Then, on Sunday, Satan gets them all day. I can't even imagine what he's got cooked up for them."




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